“I can’t wait to go home and be in the arms of my loving parents.” Alex the pup said to himself while flying through the sky. It has been ages since Alex has seen his Mum and Dad and was stocked to be going home. But all of this reminded him of his older sister Victoria. Victoria passed away because of food poisoning. Alex had loved her a lot and missed her very much.
Alex smelt the sent of his home (dog have very good noses) town and started to land his big hot air balloon. With his luck he landed right on his parents driveway. “Mum! Dad!” he screamed. “I’m home and I have so much to tell you!” But no one answered
Alex was running around the streets of his home town like a headless chook. “Mum! Dad! Where are you?” Alex yelled. Over in the distance two dogs (one male, one female) heard his cries. The girl said
“That looks and sounds like Alex!” She said. “But it can’t be.”
“Anythings possible, honey.” Said the boy.
“My baby boy is home.”
“Alex, honey we are over here!” Alex’s Dad yelled. Alex saw them and ran over to them, heart pumping while he was screaming:
“Mum! Dad! I’ve missed you so much!” And they would say:
“Same here! Same here!”
“I’ve got money!” Alex screamed, heart rising. “We can life a happy life!” He through himself into there arms.
“We have missed you so much!” Alex’s Mum told him.”Don’t ever leave home again.”
In class we worked on tying beginnings to endings( This is when you choose one of the following categories and use them in your first and last paragraph to tie them together: Intense action, sensory description, feeling, intriguing question and sound effects ) , the paragraph sandwich (the format of a paragraph: Topic sentence, supporting sentence, description sentence X 2 and concluding sentence) and the 6 traits of writing ( Ideas, word choice, sentence fluency, conventions, organization and voice) I tried to include all of these formats in this piece like in the start and the end paragraph I talked about Alex’s feelings. Feel free to comment anything that you think will make it better.